MORE OF MY SLOPPY COPY OF THE STORY I'VE BEEN WRITING..?

i'd admit, its a little boring but you know what i'd do? i'd say just a tiny bit of my life and add dialogue in, eg im talking to my dad, and i'd explain what my dad does and stuff to make it interesting. get what i mean? you dont just plot everything in one chapter and expect them to remember as the story goes on. make sure you got the tense correctly coz im seeing two tenses atm. keep up the good work!